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Someday... by CrispyCreme Someday... by CrispyCreme
I OVERLY enjoyed making this, such an amazingly detailed commission I just LOVED making every bit of this, seriously. <3

Most fun commission I have ever gotten.

DO NOT be afraid to commission me again this was FUN!

Thanks so much for commissioning!

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Composition
The structure of the piece is simple and effective. The pony's plight and reality on the bottom and his dreams on the top.

The latter portion could be slightly larger, which would allow for more room for detail, but the current look gives the idea of the dreams being sufficiently "big." Furthermore, the position of the bubble makes it a centrepiece of the picture, drawing attention and only secondarily relating the actual grim reality.

A slight decrement is a certain lack of detailed background. The heavy grey sky currently used give the picture additional sense of grief and despair, but some generic background could have a merit as well - for instance, a small hut in the background could show us the vastness of the field the pony ploughs and further add to the overall impression. An unwelcoming (even desolate) landscape could achieve this as well.
The current weather could also benefit from an expectable fog which would again stress the horrid living conditions of the protagonist. The field, slowly vanishing in the haze, would probably serve better than the current sharp horizon.

Major players
The obvious three major parts are the plough, the real pony and the dreamt pony.

The plough looks sufficiently realistic. Its surface, littered with many signs of frequent usage, speaks volume about the daily life of the pony. It could perhaps show a bit more wear at places indicating that the pony lives in such poor conditions that he can't afford even the most important repairs of his most used instrument.

The rope between the plough and the pony could be more stretched. This would show the force necessary to move it and give the picture additional air of exhaustion. The cord could also be thicker, seeing how the current one begs a question whether it would withstand the constant strain.

In the same moment, the plough serves as a good metaphor for the "shackled" way of life. It literally holds the pony, preventing him from achieving his dreams.

The pony, Day, is very well detailed and thought out. The overall colour scheme delivers a sense of a pony tied to the earth. The selected shades of brown and dark red work great with the ever-present mud, but are sufficiently different so that the pony doesn't blend in with his surroundings completely. This again serves as a good way to relay the feeling of a character that may be used to the environment he's in, but certainly doesn't belong to it by design.
The actor's appearance is that of beaten, broken colt. Shadows around the eyes and the strained posture show the hard work he has to deal with.
The mud, which the pony obviously ignores, signifies the way the actor is used to the terrible living conditions he finds himself in. A small injury is seen as well, being a nice detail that accents this even more. The terrible state the character's mane is in as well as the malnutrished body are two final, broad strokes that shows the plights of the poor pony.

Day's visage conveys many inner feelings even without the thought bubble. Regret, shame and broken dreams. His eyes show weariness, but still retain a hint of an inner spark. The furled brow gives the air of unyielding force of will. The character's internal world of dreams and hopes is surely the one thing that keeps him going.

The pony's pose could probably - again - show more force behind it. The colt almost seem to tiptoe through the mud. There is almost no visual indication of effort being made to move the plough.
It is possible that the though was to make the pony look as if he's paused in his work and lets himself be lost in his fantasies. The pony's pose - i.e. being in mid-step works against this though, at is not easily sustainable.
Moving the pony down - burrowing his hooves in the ground a bit - would probably solve the aforementioned pose issues.


The third part - the fantasy - is a great contrast to the despair-filled image below. Even though the colour scheme remains similar, the clean golden tinge speaks volumes about the prosperity and great living condition the pony would hope for.
While the general appearance is a complete opposite to the grim reality, the pony's face retains the same vigor and tenacity of his real self, connecting the two with the aforementioned willpower. This makes Day a character that is apparently not a wimp or quitter. Moreover, a hint of positive emotion - even tenderness - which the imaginary Day seems to posses is a great detail to show our protagonist's softer side.


The same two problems remain with the fantasy portion as well - that is the background and the pose.

Seeing how the though bubble remains relatively small, the former doesn't play as big of a role. A simple red wedge on blue background is a nice colour contrast that lets the pony's body and mane shine while it speaks about the vigour the pony seems to radiate.

The later is more of an issue. Day's front hooves, clasped around the microphone create few problems.
First and foremost, the microphone itself is partly obscured, which makes the viewer take a good few seconds to think before he realizes what it is the pony is actually holding. Furthermore, the overall look of the microphone contrasts with the rest of the picture by its lack of details and general rushed feeling of execution.

The character's front hooves also raise the question: How is he standing up? The microphone stand's angle shows no support, nor are any of Day's hooves preventing his imminent fall in any way.
While this seems as a crucial oversight, the fact that the lower part of the pony is not shown softens the blow.

As a whole
Overall, the picture conveys its ideas well. It is full of emotion and details, while still remaining relatively simple in its composition. The repeating motif of plough, being omitted from the fantasy, as well as countless other details serve to the artist's credit.
There are few questionable decisions (lack of background) as well as a couple of oversights on the part of the poses. The picture could easily show much more vigour and thus, more desperation.
However, these decrements serve as a minor decrement in the face of the many decisions set well towards the goal of the picture.
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GlaringStar018 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2013  Student
Are Commissions For u Free Or Points Cus If They Are Not Draw a Fantasy Where The Mane Six Are Dragons Like That How To Train Your Dragon Movie I'd Love To See That If Not I'll Be Saving Up
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ZIM402 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013
someday ... he will hold a microphone?
*please help
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Lunar-Sugar Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Featured here: [link]
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PimpDaddyPenisSquid Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
usually I'm not really into the whole my little pony thing but... I couldn't help but stop at this picture and just start bawling ;__; this poor little cutie~ its like... I dont like my little pony, AT ALL, but this picture.. its just... I can't hate this picture... its too sad and cute and aagghh~~ this is absolutely wonderful~~~ :star::heart::star:
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012
!!!
Wow! Thank you so much, thats the sweetest thing anyone has said!! Thank you Thank you!
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PimpDaddyPenisSquid Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
your very welcome, keep up the amazing work~! :star:
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HareTrinity Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Aww, poor zebra. :(

(Great pic!) :D
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Glitched-Moonveil Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
this is very awesome^^ what program do you use?~
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012
Paint tool sai c:
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Glitched-Moonveil Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
awesome,i use paint tool sai too~
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YoshiArt24 Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Student Digital Artist
i wonder what her dream was...
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Manic-Moon Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
looks realy good to me
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
Thank you c:
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MournVeil Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is FANTASTIC! Your art is so very splendid.
Would you care to join my contest? The Winner gets to be in my novel as a main character/big part. Whether it be the villain, the hero, the lover, etc!
More Info here darling:[link]
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
Thanks so much! I'll check it out~
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MournVeil Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:3
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Valach Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
this is inspiring
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
Thank you I'm glad you think so!
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MisterAibo Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
Interesting. You should consider making this open for critique. I think I'd enjoy analysing this beyond the usual comment scope.
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
Maybe in the future. ^-^
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MisterAibo Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
"Someday..." even? :)

There's really hardly any decrement to having all major things critiquable, as far as I can tell. The worst thing that can happen is that nobody makes a critique or you have to decline one that is badly written itself.
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012
Okay ^^ it's open
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alleighbean Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
WOW I FEEL SO BAD YOU SHOLD MAKE ANOTHER COMIC THAT IS WITH HTS DREAM COME TURE
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Mudpony Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Sadly for Day Dreamin, he is meant to be everything the term "mud pony" implies: dirt, drudgery, and dismal. When describing him, I tend to use a lot of D-words. Even the name Day Dreamin, which one might think is quasi-happy, implies thinking of better things than your current situation, which means you are never really where you want to be, doing what you really want to do. Depressing, huh? (Hey, look, another D-word!) Having a happy piece of art would weaken both him and the impact of this piece.

And so, if I commission more art for him, more sadness awaits. MadamMassacre sealed his fate in that regard with how well this one turned out.

Sorry ;)
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alleighbean Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Still he needs to have his dream come true because thats really depressing.... and also are u sure that is his name"mud pony" just beacuse idk who this pony really is and ive never seen him
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Mudpony Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
His name is Day Dreamin actually. He's my Original Character (OC) so you will not see him elsewhere, barring someone coming up with the same design or using mine. Mudpony is just the handle I use here and on pony related sites. It comes from a derogatory term for earth ponies used by unicorns in the Mentally Advanced and Rainbow Dash Presents universe (same universe/guys for both). I wanted an OC to capture what that meant, that went well with my handle.

Now, my canon for Day has him eventually getting to live the dream. His cutie mark does not mean what he thinks it means. But, for now, I like him miserable. Think of him as being sort of like Cranky Doodle Donkey, except you get to meet him before he settles in Ponyville ;)
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
If the commissioner asks for that maybe
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alleighbean Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
ok thanx your drawings rock cant wait to see lots more

I LOVE MY LITTLE PONIES.....
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Sn0wflake225 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
very cool idea. And great job looks amazing!
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Thanks so much!
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Sn0wflake225 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
anytime, your style is so creepy and awesome ;]
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Ahah, thanks! ^u~
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Sn0wflake225 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
no problem =]
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TwigHat Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow this is really impressive. Your use of colors and facial expression tell a very clear and very sad story. I absolutely love how this looks overall. Poor baby! I want to just give him a hug and tell him everything will be okay.
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Thank you so very much!! <3

It is very sad ;n;
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SoulSpade Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is absolutely amazing, it's no surprise that you put a lot of effort into making this and enjoyed working on it ^^

I'm mostly impressed with how you did the scene of him pulling the plow with that disheartened face; the emotion you conveyed along with details like the hoofsteps in the mud and the misplaced hairs on the mane/tail all look so well done and do a lot to add to the drawing.

I seriously wish I had you talents with things like that XD
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
This comment made me smile as wide as I could. ;u;
Thank you SO much this is the exact comment I've always looked for, attention to detail and understanding. Thank you so much, it made my day, and I was having quite a sad one. ;u; <3


Thank you so much. ;A; <3
And you DO have all the talents!!
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SoulSpade Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I was having a rough day myself, but it always make me feel better when I can do something to make someone else happy. Don't mention it ^^ You continue to amaze me with your art :'D I feel like I could learn from it
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Awwh :heart:
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SoulSpade Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Just speaking the truth XP
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Nekorukio Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
i can see that you had fun doing it! it simply looks amazing!
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Thank you! c':
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Mudpony Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's my poor, miserable Day Dreamin.

Hopefully you'll have as much fun with the other one when you get to it :)
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Aww <3
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Mudpony Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
And he's properly home at [link]. Now, with my amazing non-earth logic, I've got my pony that wants to sing as the avatar for my writing :)
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KittyKyomi Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Student Digital Artist
Awwe poor guy! He and My Oc have a similar story actually =D
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Really?
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KittyKyomi Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2012  Student Digital Artist
mmhmm, My Citrus was raised in a very strictly traditional home where things were run proper and with honor, but she longed to become a singer and perform on stage for everyone like saphire shores
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Whimsii Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Half zebra/half pony?
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CrispyCreme Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Not sure, probably o:
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